>>2466
y u want me to smell/taste/touch somany tingz?
p.s. i liek da pic,wat iz it?

>>2467
> y u want me to smell/taste/touch somany tingz?
science.

> p.s. i liek da pic,wat iz it?
delicious scientific candy.

>>2468
ohhhhhh,meow i get it,ha narf!

>>2469
I'm glad we see eye to eye on this.

You won't waste precious oxygen when the lsd I sprayed on everything wears off and you find yourself sealed inside a Soviet space capsule. It's a long way to Mars my mousey friend, you'll need every precious breath.

>>2469
lol mau5 I luv how ur just flowing along with this

Wow Pocky. I don't want to seem mean, but your writing style in the OP is ... not good.

You can dismiss my opinion as trolling or whatever. You of course don't have to listen to some anonymous guy on the internet, and there's plenty of other people here who will tell you what you want to hear.

I like the subject, and I like that you posted it, and I like you. But I can't lie to you about this. If you're not interested in honest opinions and genuine constructive criticism then I suggest you use your hot little hands to leave a greasy stain on the mouse button right now ...

Seriously I think I could enter that first paragraph into the Bulwer-Lytton Literary Parody Contest. It suffers from that level of problems.

Writers use language to paint a picture, to set a tone, to say things without literally saying them.

I'll stick to the opening paragraph here, which is so clunky it's barely readable, (eg. "with a click on a link to join").

The language is so trite it's as if you bought a cheap romance novel, rearranged the words on page one, and inserted your own names.

"centres around"? "shortly after"? "permanently etched"? Are you srs?

>>2473
actually the purpose of the paper was to answer the prompt. you don't only get points for tossing around fancy words.
this actually isn't my best writing style as I indicted in my first post, but thanks for the criticism. however I will probably disregard it as you really haven't gotten a taste of my actual writing style. :) I'm actually quite proud of some of the other things I write.

>>2473
It seems like you're trying a little too hard to impress somebody. It's cool man you don't have to prove yourself and try to use big fancy words around us.

Oh hai pocky! Midnight love <3

>>2474
Do you always lurk? Because you seem to reply pretty quickly when you have something to say.

>>2473
Your writing style is not that great either. You spent half the post saying that if she didn't like criticism she could gtfo, and another quarter saying what other people do, before finally getting down to what was wrong with her paper in your opinion all the way at the end.

No hostile, that's just the facts as I see them.

Ya, I know it's just a post on an imageboard, but I like pointing out peoples fallacies no matter what they are arguing about or for.

I really don't know what to say.That was beautiful.

>>2476
I just happened to be lurking and had something to say. Bl

looks like someone has time on their hands :3 ^ <3

>>2482
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>>2482
Excellent!

>>2482
are you lurking right now? you should make a new thread about something random to give us something to talk about. /p/ is boring now.

>>2473
you think pockys text is clunky? Well have one of these:
>Captain Caito Calenius, Master of the Marches, mighty Ultramarines Lord of a Hundred rode to war on a comet of steel and flame. His banner, held proudly aloft, bore the Imperial Eagle and the Skull for gone was better versed in the craft of death than he. At his command, the Wardens of the Eastern Fringe, the blessed brothers of the Fith, gave battle to the beasts on Calth. At their Head, Galenius, Master of the Black Company, wreathed in the light Emporer's just wrath, sundered the horde and drove them before him. By day's end a man could walk for miles without touching the ground, so thickly was it littered with the bodies of the slain. So great was the triumph, that Lord Calgar granted the Laurels of Victory to be borne on the banner of the Fifth as testament for their piety


But yeah, pockys tryin to hard...

I muss Pocks, she hasnt been here in forever :<

Where is thy fearless leader?

>>2535
I was on vacation in Disneyland :0

you are back now, I thought you were a Easter bunny :P

>>2536
Oh, ok. Hope you had fun.

>>2536
pics or it didn't happen

>>2536
this>>2545

I'll post a couple.
A again on my third paper :D

>>2563
Can you do some of my work pleasssseeeeeeeee!!!!

>>2563
You should write an essay about Disneyland for English class, then post it here.

I went to Disneyland once. It was OK; I only spent a day there. I had a Fastpass, which made it a lot better. It wasn't nearly as good as Disneyworld. Although, I spent like a week at Disneyworld, and it's a lot bigger as I remember it.

>>2563
nice and nice. Good job.

>>2282
Awesome.
Pocky i have an idea. Why don’t you write an ebook? Like "Story of Boxxy". I would like to read the full story and i think i'm not the only one. :)

>>2563
:D
It was nice reading this one, so please do post more.

>>2282 "hiding from the internet due to the development of shame and a skewing of her identity. The alteration of Catie’s online identity soon carried over into her real life"

I would like to hear you go into greater depth on this fateful point in Catie's life (and perhaps all our lives to some extent). Specifically, I was wondering, who provided the greatest emotional support for Catie, during all the harassment, and hardship she went through? Secondly, how did her classmates deal with all of this? Were they supportive, or did they bully Catie too? Furthermore, were there any anons that provided any support, or comfort, during all the chaos? Lastly, at what point did you, Catie, or others close to Catie, realize the amazing potential Catie has to be an actress/entertainer/media personality, as demonstrated by the passionate reactions she invokes on her viewers? Especially considering she can say so little, and garner such a strong reaction. That is essentially the most important element to being a top notch entertainer (making people care). More to the point, at what point was it realized that Boxxy already has an enormous fan base, which would give Catie an advantage to jump starting her (inevitable if she so chooses) career in entertaining millions across the world?

nice write pocky. you and cate are blessed to have each other as friends. also it was cool to see ya in her birthday video, even if it was for a few seconds =P

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i enjoyed reading it!

I love this. Thank you pocky for your literature.

y iz dis nawt a sticky?

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/P/tArdV.Y : #3UMmIECH

>>3420

it's hardly neccessary like

>>3431

i luv June

>>3472

>>3493
OC?

>>2282
Can you please share more of your writing?

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Pocky!!!!!!!

fat

>>3806
troll

i wish i was boxxy

>>3864
I wish I were pocky, because then catie would be my very own bff.

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